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Hi everybody,

Just wanted to let you know I’ve added chapters 2 and 3! I have the feeling I might hone these chapters again before I’m done but I’m happy with them tonight and wanted to share.

I’m writing Chapter 12 now but Chapter 2 was probably the most difficult chapter for me to write so far because I was starting to toy with point of view and struggled with what my approach would be. Originally I was torn between staying strictly with Milo, and seeing his arch-enemy Dylan only from Milo’s point of view in these early chapters, or else starting to jump around in point of view and start to see things from Dylan’s side. I think in the end I did both: we’re introduced to Dylan through Milo’s eyes, but then partway through chapter 2 we make the first leap into another character’s POV.

Jumping into different point of views is strange new territory for me as a screenwriter. In screenplays you can’t really do that. You can cut to a new scene and a different character, or maybe SUGGEST a slight shift in POV during a scene. But that’s nothing compared to diving into another character’s head completely, or even jumping between characters within a single scene. I can still see a version of this story I could tell strictly from Milo’s point of view, but I think that would be limiting. I think getting to know all the characters from inside their heads is the best way to tell this story and is frankly just more fun.

The next time I post I may leap forward in the story to a later chapter -- I’m impatient to show you guys some of the crazier alien stuff that happens next.

--Chris




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    Greetings Jackolytes,

    Those of you of a certain age or with certain rock proclivities will know of AC/DC’s Back in Black. AC/DC went from being a talented Aussie rock band to being world-bestriding rock gods -- people finally heard their sound. Well, this is Jack Trevayne’s rock god moment - his Back in Jack. A good friend of mine, Sean Daugherty, who also works as a voice actor, went to work on Scene 1Episode 4 of Sync City.  And he nailed it. Have a listen. Then tell me how good you think Sean is. Then I will tell him. Also, share Sync City with those in need of a Jack fix. Jack Trevayne may be a world-bestriding badass -- but he needs you. If you haven’t done so already -- pre-order now!

    Stay well,

    Peter

    Check it out on YouTube https://youtu.be/oeSeW6qp1AY




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