Mona.K recommended Murder Happens
You are a good writer & your first chapter is hilarious in its gallows humor & the vanity of the narrator's wife. Your 2nd chapter excerpt does need work on the commas . Also, you could use more simpler/everyday words to give your descriptions :)
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Mona.K commented on Twisted Tales for Tacky Children
I read your sample poem that you have posted here. You are hilarious & I too am sick of the sugary sweet as pie, nicey-nice message in kids books. I have a somewhat sarcastic, gallows humor even, and wouldn’t mind reading my son some books where its funny, humorous, even poking fun at the characters. To that end, I decided to write the book "Zombie Catz" that I have up on Inkshares right now. 

You have beautiful illustrations too!
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