Five times you use a passive "was". Make it active. Make it pop! Sadly, fixing my problem wouldn't come through pretending, even in all its glory. If I belonged to the mentally ill...I accepted it...
Sadly, pretending in all its glory wasn’t going to fix my situation. It was time to accept my new found normal status and bloom where I was planted. If my group was the mentally ill…I was going to accept it…right after I blamed everyone else for all of my problems…and denied my faith in God.
Why change from "I didn't know..." in all sentences except the third sentence. In the third, you say, "I didn't realize..." Think about using "realize" throughout this paragraph and eliminating the fourth sentence "I didn't know a lot of things."
Five times you use a passive "was". Make it active. Make it pop! Sadly, fixing my problem wouldn't come through pretending, even in all its glory. If I belonged to the mentally ill...I accepted it...