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All, thank you for the support. But it looks like The Dead Wizard will not be making the cut. I appreciate all of your support and interest in the book. There remain a few other publishing options, but I still intend to put this story in print. The follow up novel is waiting for a chance to be read as well, so keep an eye out for it in the future. (tentative title: Goblin Hunt)

The project page will remain up for a few more days. Feel free to give me any comments or suggestions on moving this forward. Otherwise, I bid you adieu.

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    Brian Marsden created a forum thread: Vicious criticism - available
    So my own project is about to sink, and with it the cast of the follow up book thus in Limbo again. And I am without something to do. I should be working on Chris’s map but that is basically done and I have a few ideas for stories but I’m undecided as to what to pursue next... So any way.

    Does anyone want their story critiqued? 

    Tell me where it is and I’ll go read whatever you have posted, then send you a DM with my views and nit pickings. I’ll number stuff based on paragraph from the top and list the starting word so you can find what I’m talking about. No guarantee I’ll get past the first posted chapter, but I might.

    My project sank without a comment so I might be grumpy with yours but I will promise not to steal ideas without advanced notice. ;-)

    One at a time only please. I will be reading it while "working" so it’ll take a day or two at least.  And you might want to wait to see how much of a jerk I am before you ask for a critiquing too.

    So any takers? 
    Give me 2 to finish out the week.
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    Brian Marsden commented on The Dead Wizard
    Math seems to be indicating the fate of this latest attempt of mine at selling The Dead Wizard. But fear not. Your intrepid author will keep trying to get this published. My charisma and the number of friends I have ain’t gonna sell it. I just don’t know enough people. But we’ll think of something...

    So I will stick to story tidbits for now.

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    Goblins are artificial. They were created to be quick replacement workers and fodder. This was done through gene splicing and careful breeding. 

    The primary method of doing this was training through cannibalism. Or as goblins call it Osmiso. Goblin digestive tracks are good a filtering out nerve cells, be it gray matter or nerve fiber. Some of this is absorbed into the body of a growing goblin where it can be used to replace or repair damaged nerves, hopefully bringing knowledge and repetitive reflex knowledge with it. When successful, the goblins learn at a much faster rate. mastering tasks that their meals had taken months to learn.

    Through Osmiso, goblins were fed their dead and the the dead of their enemies to make them smarter, stronger and faster. However, it also gave them memories of battles they died in and foolish moves that had gotten them killed. And when an avatar appeared and offered Bataete Evantu access to Paradise if he chased the creators away form the Well of the Gods, the tale spread among the goblins even faster after he was recycled.

    Osmiso made the goblins insubordinate and eventually lead to them leading a rebellion against their creators. Along with the other created humanoids, they led the war that drove everybody away from the Well of the Gods. But the war and victory had an affect on them too.

    Performing Osmiso on less aggressive races led to weakness and a tendency to want peace. Soon the goblins found themselves on the bottom of the humanoid power structure. Ogres, hobgoblins and orcs that they had commanded were soon taking over command and relegating the goblins to slave status or worse.

    When the human explorers arrived and chased off the empire that enslaved them, the goblins welcomed it. After several failed attempts at the regaining their place at the top, the wise ones realized the effects victory was having on their society and a truce was quickly agreed to, with the prohibition on performing Osmiso on non-goblinoids firmly inscribed in it.
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      Brian Marsden commented on The Dead Wizard

      I have tried to put the history and background of myworld into words before and it never seems to come out right. Originally I was going to do it as an epic poem but I am not a very good poet, and all such attempts failed. 

      Whats posted here isn’t exactly a spoiler since only a few in the story know the history and it doesn’t really matter to most of them. The nature  and purpose of the highway system is irrelevant to you when all you have is a bicycle. (Does that seem like a forced analogy? Well bullying analogies is a hobby of mine.)

      It plays a part in how things last. Why does a millennium old sword still have an edge? Because it wasn’t made yet and thus it can’t go dull yet.

      I don’t know. Read it and if you have further questions I can try to explain batter. But to really get it you should BUY MY BOOK and then we can better discuss what is what and why.

      The secret to the world in the Dead Wizard is :

      SPOILER

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      Time. You see the Well of the Gods is a planet-locked black hole. The Creator and the dragons, with the help of dwarves and giants, built the dimensional portals into the planet and they are tied into the black hole and it’s extra-dimensional properties.

      It took since the beginning of time to get it all set up, but when completed the creations from across the universe could safely visit the planet, commune with their guardians/gods, and return to their own space and time without permanent harm. The achieved this by pulling the pilgrim spirit back in time. You see you can’t harm what doesn’t exist yet.

      The Well World is influenced like a dream. What the pilgrims perceive and wish can and will happen, as long as another pilgrim doesn’t prevent it. The world is a communal delusion that protects the pilgrim as they journey to find "god". They then return through their portal to the real world waking enlightened. Should they perish along the journey, their being does the same thing, only without the enlightenment and with an existential memory that they may interpret as they will.


      As time went by many pilgrims chose to stay in the dream realm of the Well World, settling down roots with each other and with manifestations of their minds. These first generations were nigh immune and immortal in the Well World, that is so long as time in the real world never caught up to them killing their reality body and their manifestation with it.


      Inevitably the pilgrims began having children with each other and the manifestations of their and the gods dreams. Slowly they populated the world and the Dragon States that guard the Well. A great civilization grew up. With each following generation the immunity lapsed more and more until those with "magic" powers were less and less common among the population.


      The number of pilgrims fluctuated as the Avatars’ wards went on without the Avatars watching and guiding their civilizations. Gradually the wards’ reliance on the Avatars faded, making the Creator happy that they were learning to get by with each other on their own. But all was not peaceful.


      Some of the gods were not content to wait for their wards to come and seek guidance from them. These gods, some abandoned by their wards and some determined to guide their wards, fought to escape often. The abandonment and loneliness maddening them even more as they saw other wards seeking guidance. For them the paradise in the Creator’s court became unbearable and they became obsessed with escape and revenge. Avatars split into factions as some plotted to escape. They probed the far reaches of the infinite palace that was their prison. Up, down, in infinite directions, they struggled to find a way out.


      The frustration and anger was too much for even gods, and thus the determined Avatars became demons determined to reenter the physical world and the joys they had had there. Pushing their influence in various directions they tried to incite rebellion among even the pilgrims and their children.


      Their repeated actions had consequences though, and each escape attempt cost them access to their wards. separating them further.

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        Hi @Brian Marsden we don’t place restrictions on when you can re-submit your project - there is no time limit that you have to wait. A failed project is automatically set back to draft mode. We have lots of users "restart" their campaigns, and we are totally fine with that. Also, extensions aren’t encouraged, but we will give you one if you feel that you need a little more time or that you are close to your goal. There is something to be said for the last few days of a campaign. I have seen campaigns get their last 100 pre-orders in the last 24-48 hours of a campaign because of the finality and the "last chance!" feeling that it brings. Good luck!!
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          Brian Marsden created a forum thread: What do you do if you fail?
          So what happens if you do your pre-order drive and fail?
          I get the impression most people just reset their time to a longer time. But I’m not sure. And if you don’t and the time runs out are you not allowed to resubmit that book? Anything like that?
          Are you sent back to draft and not allowed to bring it back for a year?
          Has anyone else not reached their goal?
          I still got a month but things aren’t looking up. So I was wondering what happens after the time runs out.

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