“I think I’ve got an incursion.”
This sentence jarred a little for me, it feels a little overlong/clunky.
silently cursing Sammy and his accursed need for freedom that was causing his daughter so much pain
I love the slow build up to this moment of realisation and this sentence is really visual and sudden.
before withdrawing like he’d stuck his finger in the electrical socket.
“I just wanna go home, and you’re being very confusing.”
“I just wanna go home, and you’re being very confusing.”
Should this be "where they have always been". I wasn’t sure if it was suggesting they haven’t moved, or that they’ve been on adventures. :)
The trees are where they have been
She stared at him incredulously. “Trees can’t own anything. They’re trees.”
