Very Bette Davis mingled with Katherine Hepburn.
Maybe set these off with punctuation or italics.
PLeaseplease answer. Where are you? I texted back. Alive. Don’t know where yet. U and George? A long pause and my phone rattled to life again. OMG we’re safe got out of fire.we have your car. Will find you. Battery on phone good? Track that way. Phone good. I didn’t intend to wait around to be rescued. Plus, I wasn’t certain it really was Louise. Why didn’t Dave take them too? Why just leave them there? Could they be involved? Or could just Louise be involved? I shrugged away the questions. Right now, get out of wherever I was and see what came next.
Might pick a different word. Sloth to me always carries connotations of lazy and this is really an action scene.
How did it feel? Physically and emotionally?
I made a fist and opened it again, and my palm was hot and bright, as though lava flowed through my veins.
Hahahaha! Awesome! (and horrible)
rned for a second before fading away. I snickered. “Great. I’ve created a fire ant.”
