This opening line for the next chapter doesn’t really capture my attention as much as the first chapter’s line did. :(
Mom and Brian were both at work by the time I woke
Well, it looks like Lauren’s problem of where she was going to live has been resolved, and the chapter ends on a happy note, but... umm... I don’t really see any reason to keep reading? I mean, it looks like Lauren is away from any immediate tension, so there’s nothing really holding me to the book. The end of the chapter is more, "That’s nice" than "I wonder what happens next" y’know?
I stood and leaned down to kiss her cheek. “Thanks, Mom. I love you.”“I love you, too, darling.”
I’m not so sure about this line. Yeah, it’s kind of funny, but it’s also kind of jarring. Exactly how does one roll one’s eyes so hard that it hurts?
It’s a funny line. I like it.
“Ever.” I rolled my eyes so hard it hurt.
He looked like a tired, confused Santa Claus.
He looked like a tired, confused Santa Claus.
My breath froze in my chest as I bolted from the safety of the warm cab into a rainy English night.
