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Maggie West Bean commented on an excerpt of ARCADIA
You used the word "many," but only pluralized "spell." Additionally because of the use of commas, each noun should stand on its own in the sentence. 
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I learned many illness[es]
I learned many plague blindness[es] *awkward
I learned many insani[ties] *awkward

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    I learned many spells, illness, plague blindness and insanity.
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    Maggie West Bean commented on an excerpt of ARCADIA
    Shouldn’t this be "had been?" The next sentence/paragraph says that it’s on the ground.
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      No detail of the chaos? What happened before she raced back down the road? They yelled or screamed at her? Threatened her? Armed themselves and ran toward her? 
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        and turned it into total chaos
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        Maggie West Bean commented on an excerpt of ARCADIA
        This is an unusual verb to use here.  Perhaps "caught" is a better choice.
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          This is an unusual verb to use here.  Perhaps "caught" is a better choice.
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