This is intimate, in a nice way.

Again, I’m uninitiated here and commenting as I go along, but I feel it would’ve been better to establish Marki as an Ice Mage earlier on - otherwise this comes a bit out of the blue and makes these two paragraphs a touch tricky to contextualise.    

As an uninitiated reader, I find this phrase a little confusing. Did she step away by pure happenstance? Is this another attack from Lord Marki? That much isn’t especially clearly laid out. If it’s designed to make Saran seem more effortlessly powerful/badass, then I personally think it comes off as a bit glib. Just personal preference.

I find this interesting. So often, including in my own work, the protagonist’s father is the benevolent, Lawful Good mentor type. I’m intrigued by the use of language here, which suggests that Saran’s father was less than scrupulous in "snatching" the throne, perhaps illegitimately.

Again, keep an eye on consistency - the narration has referred to him as Lord Marki and as Odan. Possibly best to stick to one or the other, at least outside of dialogue.