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While I like "sparked to life" very much, you use "flickered to life" about the torches in the previous paragraph. I’d pick one to keep and one to change.
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    I don’t think you need this. The questions before are indications of him thinking to himself and stating it detracts from the importance of those questions.
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      He thought to himself again as he had many times that night.
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      Again, this either needs a comma or a start of a new sentence after "wrong". 
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        omething was wrong he could feel it all around him
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        I very much like this sentence and the history it hints at. I think it needs a comma before "yet" though. 
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          yet did so tonight with grim determination
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