This made me snort. Jeff really is a contemptible wastrel, but he’s great to read.
Jeff flailed his hands, unable to find a gesture that would properly convey his outrage.
Lovely stuff. Can’t beat an all-powerful deity with a name like Jeff.
“Jeff,” she began. Instantly, he turned and glared at her. She took a breath and corrected herself, “Great God Avatar.”
unnecessarily majestic figure
unnecessarily majestic figure
This, along with the bits beforehand, is lovely - amazing what you can learn about a character just from their footwear!
Looking at those boots was like staring into a deep hole. Without buttons or buckles or even a toe-crease, they fit like they were grown rather than made
I like this, it’s a neat little bit of characterisation. No need to spell out Keenley’s attributes - this is much more elegant.
His quill pen, falling from its perch atop his ear, left yet another long black streak down the back of his blue learner’s robe, and joined several others in becoming permanently mislaid.
