Earth’s United States’ Pennsylvania
Be careful of tenses here. If you start in first person it’s jarring for the reader to see a switch to third.
she can see more of the detail of the city’s shape
Super cool detail that sent me straight to Google to research what it meant. I love this sort of thing because it adds depth for those readers that know what it means, and elicits curiosity from the rest.
This tends to mean an unexpected mistake. Do you mean taboo?
This definitely gives good atmosphere to the story’s backdrop.
It’s contents are solely this studio and a restaurant called “Gino’s” which a recent review labeled simply as “A dump.”