holy mother of pearl, what an image!
her wrists were bleeding and the wetness helped her arm slide further
It’s interesting that you use this as a unit of measure. Do these people know what the states of the US looked like?
Earth’s United States’ Pennsylvania
Be careful of tenses here. If you start in first person it’s jarring for the reader to see a switch to third.
she can see more of the detail of the city’s shape
Super cool detail that sent me straight to Google to research what it meant. I love this sort of thing because it adds depth for those readers that know what it means, and elicits curiosity from the rest.
This tends to mean an unexpected mistake. Do you mean taboo?