He looked up another molecule, and nodded. Just needed a little nitrogen, but there was more than enough in the air. He sketched out a circle inside the lid of the pizza box.
I would be careful with videogame references like this, depending on your target audience. Fair enough you may be after a demographic that will be completely comfortable with Warcraft, raids and other such terminology, but you may find you alienate a lot of older readers even despite WoW’s popularity. I’m sure you’ve considered this already but thought it was worth pointing out anyway.
Also - be careful of possessives - should read "challenge in its eyes" - no apostrophe in "its."
I would be careful with videogame references like this, depending on your target audience. Fair enough you may be after a demographic that will be completely comfortable with Warcraft, raids and other such terminology, but you may find you alienate a lot of older readers even despite WoW’s popularity. I’m sure you’ve considered this already but thought it was worth pointing out anyway.
Also - be careful of possessives - should read "challenge in its eyes" - no apostrophe in "its."