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Very nice chapter, especially in the wake of the last one. The last one gives a great deal of mechanics and ethereal memory-ness, whereas this one is much more action and confrontational. My only recommendation would be that there's an opportunity to extend the conversation between TSM and Crow-Face, to give a little more antagonism. They settle into not killing each other really quickly for two people who were just trying to kill each other. Plus, if I'm TSM, I would be a little more hesitant to bring the Cannoi along if I'm headed to a place that's the most ultimately sacred place I can imagine. I would try and leave him behind somehow before reaching the entrance. But those are just my thoughts. Looking forward to the rest!
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        The Sleeping Man did not sleep as his moniker would suggest. Many years ago under the Green Mountain Temple where the monks practiced sword dances and lit heady incense, a little girl in apprentice robes ran up to the head of the monks and pulled his robe, “Big Brother, there’s a sleeping man! Come!” A chamber had been revealed underneath the temple itself, in the oldest part of the sanctuary. The monks found him lying in the chamber silent and still. His violet eyes fixated on the cei. . .

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          The Sleeping Man did not sleep as his moniker would suggest. Many years ago under the Green Mountain Temple where the monks practiced sword dances and lit heady incense, a little girl in apprentice robes ran up to the head of the monks and pulled his robe, “Big Brother, there’s a sleeping man! Come!” A chamber had been revealed underneath the temple itself, in the oldest part of the sanctuary. The monks found him lying in the chamber silent and still. His violet eyes fixated on the cei. . .

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            Doubt would kill in this barren landscape as easily as a blade.
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