So this was a terrific opening chapter! This is brimming with heaps of potential. There are a few grammatical things and some things could be tidied up but a real good read through and edit would fix most of that. And I’m probably just being excessively picky since I’m buried in the editing of my own work so stuff jumps at me. But still, an outstanding start. Reminds me a lot of "The Witcher" games of which I’ve always been a big fan. Will be back to read more as time permits!! 

"probably" twice in close proximity...

Outstanding paragraph! 

try to avoid using mounts so close together.

Terrific line! Such a powerful reflection on their upbringing in just one simple line!