Hi, everyone. I just finished my first novel.

Created over 1 year ago by Kevin Muhleisen with 6 comments
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10688210 10100849019215815 7816283912676310835 o Kevin Muhleisen · Author · added over 1 year ago
I uploaded chapter 2 of A Bird’s Prey. Let me know what you think. 
Me J. Graham-Jones · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
Welcome, @Kevin Muhleisen and congratulations on completing your first draft :) You’ll find the community here is incredibly supportive, and also always happy to offer invaluable, constructive feedback.
10688210 10100849019215815 7816283912676310835 o Kevin Muhleisen · Author · added over 1 year ago
Thank you both for the feedback. I really appreciate it. It’s not always easy to see when something isn’t working or doesn’t sound right. 
Tahani book Tahani Nelson · Author · edited over 1 year ago
Hey. Welcome to inkshares! I think you’ll love it here.

I like what you have so far, but I was bothered that you switch tenses (from present to past) between the second sentence and the third sentence without any sort of break or new paragraph. I’d break that up in some way so you don’t lose people before they even begin. 

Good luck with your campaign!
Img 20160806 023915 Luke Fellner · Author · added over 1 year ago
Congratulations! I hope you keep up the good work. I’ll check out your sample and leave some feedback if I can!
10688210 10100849019215815 7816283912676310835 o Kevin Muhleisen · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
I am about halfway through the second draft. I’m a little nervous sharing, but I’m pretty proud of what I’ve accomplished. I’ve made the first chapter available and I would appreciate any input.