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Img 20160806 023915 Luke Fellner · Author · added over 1 year ago
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428313 265782713496947 10458611 n Lemery.Logan · Author · added over 1 year ago
This still active?
Img 1943 Benjamin Z Chapman · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 2 likes
If anyone has any time to check out 100 Rentals it would be awesome. I haven’t had much feedback and at this point it’s hard to know what to change/alter to make the project better. 
Mascot eyes Scott Carss · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@Arthur Guimaraes It’s been done before but if you write well then it is always a subject people seem interested in. It really depends on how well you can pull it off. Any idea can be brilliant if an excellent author is writing it and vice-versa.
Screenshot 2014 07 16 21 28 19 Arthur Guimaraes · Author · added over 1 year ago
That’s a good read, I liked your book.  Can you please read my idea and tell me if it has a future? I like your style, that’s why I am asking
14500641 10100497706195102 1864963888702911228 o J. S. Chlapowski · Author · added over 1 year ago
You know, I never noticed the Dashboard until now?  Very obvious solution.  Thanks, everyone :-D

Mascot eyes Scott Carss · Author · added over 1 year ago
I thought it would be pretty obvious which one did what on the dashboard page.
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · added over 1 year ago
To clarify what Scott said, On your book page you should see in the top right of your screen "Dashboard"
On that dashboard youll see three tabs on the left of the screen. The bottom tab will say "Update Readers" This is how you send your entire following updates on your book.
Mascot eyes Scott Carss · Author · added over 1 year ago
@J. S. Chlapowski To send a direct message to a single follower go to their profile page and it’s right under their follow button. It says direct message their. To send an update to all followers click dashboard next to edit project at the top right of the page. The page it will open up has options over to the left side for all those needs.
14500641 10100497706195102 1864963888702911228 o J. S. Chlapowski · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Luke Fellner - that’s good advice, and a relief.  I really don’t care for the tit-for-tat aspect of social media, though it is nice to pass along good intentions.  Substantive feedback is a great way to do that.  

I’ll check out your book very soon :-)  Please consider checking out mine as well.  I’d love to hear from someone who isn’t a friend or family.  

Two things I’ve noticed people doing that I have yet to figure out how to do on inkshares: a). send direct messages to individual followers, and b). send an update text to all followers.  Does anyone mind helping me figure this out?  I really hope the answer isn’t obvious.  But I also kind of do.

Img 20160806 023915 Luke Fellner · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
Don’t worry about your follower count that much, it’ll grow. Just don’t go following people you don’t really want to hear from, I’ve noticed a lot of people do it, and when I see my project and name are among 200 people they follow that same day it discourages me from looking at their project... And I like looking at projects.

If you have the time, please check out my book The Burned and let me know what you think! The best way to gain real followers is by being active. Help out in the forums, read some stories and give feedback, and DM your followers any questions you have. Usually they want to help you, and they want to tell you what they think of your story. The one thing everyone loves to talk about is their own opinions, so use that to grow your story and take advantage to the unique reader/writer connection inkshares provides.
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
That sounds great J! Also thank you both for the kind words :D
14500641 10100497706195102 1864963888702911228 o J. S. Chlapowski · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
I’m down.  Sorry I’m a little late to the party, guys.  I’ve been mostly reaching out to friends and family to gain followers so my reader count wouldn’t be embarrassing when approaching the larger Inkshare community.  Though, to be fair, I’m not sure what would qualify as embarrassing.  I’m new at this.

It’s 11 am in Spain, and I have nothing to do all day except write and provide feedback.  If you’d like to do the same for me, I’d more than appreciate it.  Right now my page is looking a little sparse.  
Screen shot 2016 10 03 at 11.40.12 am K. O. Daniels · Reader · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@Joseph Keeler I agree, beautiful and well-written prologue.
Mascot eyes Scott Carss · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@Joseph Keeler Even a free day isn’t really a free day at University, but I managed to get a start on your book. I’ll start reading chapter one soon, but I would just like to say that your prologue is beautiful.
Mascot eyes Scott Carss · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 2 likes
I’m free for the rest of the day so I’ll try to check a few out as well.
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · added over 1 year ago
Ill be doing another sweep later today when I get home!
Screen shot 2016 10 03 at 11.40.12 am K. O. Daniels · Reader · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
I joined about 2 days ago and would love any constructive criticism. The genre is Young Adult before you decide to read. 
I will of course go through all the books here. I’ve been browsing since I joined^^
Img 20160806 023915 Luke Fellner · Author · added over 1 year ago

I’d always love for more people to check out my book and tell me what they think!


Jebnbubl P.H. James · Author · added over 1 year ago
There’s always the Critshares group on Scribophile for any folks looking for detailed feedback. Info is in the first post at the bottom of this thread. 

Mascot eyes Scott Carss · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
I’d still love to get some more feedback. If I have time I’ll take a look at yours Joseph. I’ve got something in a little while so it probably won’t be today.
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · added over 1 year ago
Yeah that would be great man! Not many people have actually looked at mine

Bryvxbbn jacob browning · Author · added over 1 year ago
Seems everyone hass gotten busy haha but I’m trying to work through some. If anyone still wants me to check them out let me know.
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
Wow what happened to our active forum? haha
Img 1943 Benjamin Z Chapman · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
I would love to join this if it’s not too late!
Bryvxbbn jacob browning · Author · added over 1 year ago
Seems like we died off here but if anyone ever gets some free time I just put up another part would love all the amazing minds here to check it out.
20160420 112451 J.M. Bush · Author · added over 1 year ago
@J. Graham-Jones I’d love it if you gave me some feedback, too! And I shall return the favor to all!
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@Rebecca Clark and Jayme Beddingfield Not at all! go right ahead
%e2%80%9cshe turned to the sunlight and shook her yellow head and whispered to her neighbor   winter is dead.%e2%80%9d %281%29 Rebecca Clark and Jayme Beddingfield · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@Joseph Keeler too late to join?

Mascot eyes Scott Carss · Author · added over 1 year ago
@J. Graham-Jones I don’t think you got to me either. At least not that I can see.
Me J. Graham-Jones · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Joseph Keeler I hadn’t! But I am now :)
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · added over 1 year ago
@J. Graham-Jones cant tell if you looked at mine :) let me know if you got to it!
Me J. Graham-Jones · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
I think I’ve gotten around to everyone in this thread. If I’ve missed anyone, please let me know!
Img 20160806 023915 Luke Fellner · Author · added over 1 year ago

@Scott Carss Thank you very much for the input, I am hoping to have more content up soon, hopefully it will bring a wider audience as well as keep readers wanting more.

If anyone else would like to check out my story it would make me very happy!

My face Joseph Keeler · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Allison Griner most of it is thanks and critique from the same people! Theres really only a few people still active :)
Hzkl4o r Jesse Swinson · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Scott Carss Thanks so much for the compliments. Admittedly, I did draw a lot of inspiration from the handy dandy DM’s Guide when I started worldbuilding long ago. I’ll have to find that typo...thanks for the heads up.

@J.M. Bush No worries man. Thanks again.

@Ryan Cook I’ll have to check out your project. I invite you to be as constructively critical of my book as humanly possible. Eviscerate me if necessary. Anything helps for me to be a better writer.
Ql2caeeh Allison Griner · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
I’ve been following along with this thread, and I think it’s so awesome how everyone has been sharing. I really want to jump in and leave more notes, but now this is such a long thread that I’m not 100% sure on where to even begin. Keep being awesome, though! 
Bio pic 2 Ryan Cook · Author · added over 1 year ago
I’ve been trying to get around and leave some helpful comments (without being too critical...) and I would love to get some comments and feedback on my story A Tale of Ghosts and Guardians. I’ll take anything  (even the devastatingly critical ones) and I’ll return the favor.
Unholy pursuit poster A. White · Author · added over 1 year ago
I too would like someone to view "Clash with the Immortals." It consist of 24 chapters and I just added the fourth chapter. I’m hoping to add all 24 eventually. But I warn you, it’s written for adults and it’s not for those who are squeamish or easily embarrass.  :) 
Mascot eyes Scott Carss · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@Luke Fellner I’d probably add a little more if I were you. I’d like to see a little more of the characters as I don’t feel I have a great hold on their personalities as of now.
20160420 112451 J.M. Bush · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Jesse Swinson Oops, I meant prologue! 
Mascot eyes Scott Carss · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Jesse Swinson I read your prologue and first chapter, both are excellent. The prologue had me reminiscing about Planescape my favourite DnD setting. I noticed a typo in the paragraph where Dark gets mad at Jack where you wrote defeated;y I’m pretty sure that was unintentional.
Hzkl4o r Jesse Swinson · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@J.M. Bush Thank you for your feedback sir. When you say first chapter do you mean the prologue or chapter one? Just to clarify. I know I tend to struggle with that at time. Glad you enjoy the world!
Mascot eyes Scott Carss · Author · added over 1 year ago
I’m planning to check out your works. I’d love any feedback I could get on my book The Adventures of MONOMAN. I just have to handle some chores before I can look at your projects.
20160420 112451 J.M. Bush · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Jesse Swinson I reviewed your first chapter. Loved it. I didn’t mention this on the page, but after reading it, I’m thinking that you separated the dialogue well in the second half (formatting-wise that is) but in the first half, there are several large paragraphs where more than one person speaks, and there is no separation. I would chop that up so that it flows better for the reader. Does that make sense? Anyway, dig your world, dude. Dig it.
20160420 112451 J.M. Bush · Author · added over 1 year ago
I just uploaded Chapter 8. I’d love for some feedback on my chapters. You all have been super helpful so far. Chapter 1 is good to go, thanks to all of your help. Again, I’m happy to return the favor!
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · added over 1 year ago
Just finished uploading chapter two: The Gilded Road on my book page!
Img 20160806 023915 Luke Fellner · Author · added over 1 year ago
   I’m looking for some reviews of my sample, would also like to know if I should add more chapters to my page or if the first one is enough. Thank you to all who check it out for me!
Me Leelyn Colclasure · Author · added over 1 year ago
My second chapter is officially up!

I’ll be making my way to read all of your additions soon as well!  Well done, us!
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
So as of right now, I will be releasing my second chapter later today! I hope you guys like it!
Img 2511 Jane-Holly Meissner · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@J.M. Bush  thank you so much  - I’m glad you liked it. I left a review for yours as well. :) 
20160420 112451 J.M. Bush · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@Jane-Holly Meissner Loved your first chapter. So magical and so cute. Reviewed and, to be honest, cannot find any flaws. Just lovely.
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · added over 1 year ago
So much for us being free on the weekends haha!
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Leelyn Colclasure Im sure most of us would prefer recommendations :)
Headshotprofile Antimony Noon · Author · added over 1 year ago
@J. Graham-Jones Thank you! That’s quite a compliment! 
Bryvxbbn jacob browning · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Leelyn Colclasure  From what I can tell a recommendation is the one that gets sent to your followers. So they can see it on the activity feed and when they get a recommended email it will include yours and show what you said about it. The reviews go on the side to be viewed by anyone that checks out the book but it doesn’t get shared around your friends to my knowledge. Though it might still show on your activity feed if your followers view it.
Me Leelyn Colclasure · Author · added over 1 year ago
What it the difference really between a recommendation and a review?  And which would you guys rather have?  I want to share your books with my followers (even though that really is just pretty much you guys). 
Me J. Graham-Jones · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@Antimony Noon there’s not much I can say other than keep doing what you’re doing! 
Headshotprofile Antimony Noon · Author · edited over 1 year ago
I’d love some feedback on my two newer chapters if anyone has the time! :)
Img 2511 Jane-Holly Meissner · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 3 likes
@J.M. Bush I’d love for you to take a look at my book, when you get a chance. :) I really like your idea of making dwarves the main characters and putting them in a new light.
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
Happy weekend everybody! Seems this thread has sorta become the communal trade thread. Its necessary for us to get back in action :) This past week was a really busy one. I hope everyone is better now that the weekend has started!
20160420 112451 J.M. Bush · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
Now that chapter one has been hacked to bits and made infinitely better, I’d love y’all to look at chapter two. I’m happy to do the same for anyone else. Just tag me and I’m all over it!
Victorianphoto1editauthor2 Christopher Lee · Author · added over 1 year ago
Yeah we all do it! Also I love your descriptions lol
Bryvxbbn jacob browning · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Joseph Keeler  its all good you arent the only one !
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · added over 1 year ago
@jacob browning thank you! Yeah ive been trying to shorten my descriptions, sometimes i get carried away in a moment and dwell too long on describing it.
Bryvxbbn jacob browning · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@Joseph Keeler Just finished reading the start of yours. The short prologue was interesting  a cool way of showing the creation of your world.  I you are very descriptive too which is awesome. Sometimes I feel like its too much and it slows it down but overall its great. Looking forward to seeing more.

Separate note- awesome cover art.
Fb img 1523331776380 Mark A. Mix · Author · added over 1 year ago
Been sick / working a bunch & having computer issues.  This comment comes from my phone.  I will get to reading everyone’s stuff eventually, as soon as I fix my computer.  While I technically CAN read them on my phone, I despise reading anything of substance on my phone.  Anyway, happy writing and good luck to everyone.  Hope to be back on soon.  
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · added over 1 year ago
Im looking forward to all your critique on my work as well. Should be amazing.
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · added over 1 year ago
Looks like people have been busy since i was gone! I have more chapters to read.
Headshotprofile Antimony Noon · Author · edited over 1 year ago
@jacob browning  - EDIT - Jacob, I’ve copied all the comments off my recent activity log and sent them to you in a DM so you have access to them!

@Kim Whale I don’t think there was anything that desperately needed looking at at all! 
Hzkl4o r Jesse Swinson · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Kim Whale Don’t beat yourself up about it. Still loving your story and characters! What I do is read it out loud to myself before I post it. Helps me catch things that don’t flow right. Definitely not a catch all...but it helps!
Bryvxbbn jacob browning · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Antimony Noon Thanks Antimony! I can see what you highlighted though I can only see the comment you made for the first one :(.   
With your first comment I was thinking about that for a while... I omitted his name because I wanted a odd mysterious tone to  his walk through for a few reasons. He will be very important to the story but, isn’t the main protagonist.  Not sure I managed that well enough though.
Headshotprofile Antimony Noon · Author · added over 1 year ago
@jacob browning Have gone through and added some comments to your draft. I love your setting, it really draws me into a familiar sort of fantastical setting and I’m interested to see what happens from here. I’m very fond of mages and magic (as is clear by my own writing!), but you do have a bit of a vendetta against commas! 
Headshotprofile Antimony Noon · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Kim Whale Done! Have left some comments on the second chapter. 
Headshotprofile Antimony Noon · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Leelyn Colclasure  Thank you! :) 
Me Leelyn Colclasure · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 2 likes
@#;[÷ Antimony Noon.  This is what hidden fantasy in the modern world looks like when done successfully.  I am invested in all three of your characters already.  You get all these little glimpses into these personalities without ever making it obvious.  

I even feel connected to your Assasssin character.  Clearly he has his demons, if the mini bar is any indication.  So distant and yet still made human.  I want moooore.
Img 2511 Jane-Holly Meissner · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 2 likes
@Jesse Swinson Nothing to apologize for! Just a few things that stood out to me. I loved the descriptions of the city and its inhabitants, and the river’s name is pretty genius. :)
Victorianphoto1editauthor2 Christopher Lee · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 2 likes
Oh boy so many projects to catch up on !
Hzkl4o r Jesse Swinson · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@Jane-Holly Meissner Thanks for the feedback. Admittedly, I was kind of worried about him coming off like that. I just had a rough time doing it differently. In my mind, he was unhappy to be there but happy to see his brother. Sorry about the conjunctions. Nasty habit of mine. I’m glad you liked the story.
Img 2511 Jane-Holly Meissner · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@Jesse Swinson Reading through your prologue I like the world you’re presenting and the air of mystery around your "orderly" character as he wades through the chaos. However he seems to switch personalities when he’s around his brother - getting excited, etc. Not necessarily something you should change as you know the character better than I do, it just felt like an abrupt change. You also start your sentences with a lot of conjunctions (and/but) which is fine in moderation. That’s just a writing nitpick though, I think you’re off to a great start with your story. :)
20160420 112451 J.M. Bush · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@Jesse Swinson Thanks so much! I really appreciate you saying that. I know that a lot of people tend to get bored with dwarves, so I’m trying to make as engaging and diverse a cast as possible, but working the dwarven bits in here and there. I’ve got about seven chapters posted at the moment, but the book is finished. I just need to upload more.
Hzkl4o r Jesse Swinson · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@J.M. Bush Loved the story and the world you created. I do tend to get bored with the "standard" fantasy races, but you do a great job with the dwarves. I think that @Antimony Noon gave a lot of good advice on how to clean it up to make it a smooth read. Excited for more to come! 
Me J. Graham-Jones · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 2 likes
@jacob browning  @Leelyn Colclasure thanks so much for your kind comments! 

i should have some time this weekend to get around to doing a load more reviews :)
Bryvxbbn jacob browning · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 2 likes
There is so many great and interesting stories here I could go broke. I’m trying to read through as many of them them as I can  and drop feedback. 
@J. Graham-Jones your was fantastic and Im really excited to see more of the world you have built. 

Getting to the rest of you soon would love any feedback as well.
20160420 112451 J.M. Bush · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 2 likes
@Jesse Swinson I’d love to hear  your two cents!
Me Leelyn Colclasure · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
Woot! I think I finally fixed all (most) of the grammar mistakes I made with my rushed first copy.  Thanks again for all of the feedback!
Me Leelyn Colclasure · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 2 likes
@%/×+>;$ J. Graham-Jones.

Witherfist.  This is pure talent.  The beginning of both tales leaves we wanting to know more.  What event transpires that makes her willing to ink herself with the demon’s name?  I received just a taste and now curiousity has me turning the pages...well...wanting to anyways!

Superbly written and expertly delivered.
Hzkl4o r Jesse Swinson · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@Leelyn Colclasure Why thank you! I am sincerely glad you like it. I’ll have to check your book shortly!

To anyone else: I apologize for the silence. I have been bogged down by my day job and the various other projects I have as of late. If anyone would still like my two cents on any of their work, please let me know. I will make time!
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
It would seem the at symbol doesnt always work on mobile so people are unable to tag people.
Me Leelyn Colclasure · Author · added over 1 year ago
@#$Jesse Swinson (Now I don’t even want to know how to tag someone the right way)

You Mad Genius, you!  I love it!  Your wit and glorious description that you put into each scene is simply a treat to read.  This style of writing I would lose sleep over in my younger days.  I have a feeling  this book will be habit forming.
Me Leelyn Colclasure · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Elizabeth Bollmann.   Ever since Magic Kingdom for Sale by Terry Brooks  (or even further back to Mark Twain and his ever resourceful Yankee), I haved loved the stories of people whisked away to lands of fantasy and adventure.  Your poor lad is thrown head first into it!  I greatly look forward to seeing how he manages transform from a nervous boy to the man that saves the Realm!
Me Leelyn Colclasure · Author · edited 4 days ago · 1 like
@Kim Whale (I am just gonna  keep pretend typing it tags you guys).

The City Will Fall!  Have no idea where it’s going, but I knowwww I want to follow!  Mix of powers and dystopia...so far so great.  I am keeping in the loop for this one.
Me Leelyn Colclasure · Author · edited over 1 year ago
@Mark A. Mix. Man I am definitely hooked.  The darker descriptuons you gave kept me leaning forward in my seat, as if I were watching a suspenseful movie.  Very well done.

Edit:  And apparently I do not know how to properly tag a person...
Bryvxbbn jacob browning · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Joseph Keeler haha true thought i had tagged @Mark A. Mix 
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · added over 1 year ago
@jacob browning who was that first comment for? lot of people here who have first chapters :)
Bryvxbbn jacob browning · Author · edited 4 days ago
@Kim Whale stumbled upon your book earlier but didn’t have time to look at it. Found it again through this and gave it a look and now i really want to read more.
Bryvxbbn jacob browning · Author · added over 1 year ago
Really got pull into your first chapter cant wait to see more. I like the tone you’ve set already. I just put up the prologue would love any feedback to it as well.
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@J.M. Bush thank you for the review! that was very nice ill give a recommendation the second i can get on my computer!
20160420 112451 J.M. Bush · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@Joseph Keeler got ’em and have fixed and/or responded. Thanks! I reviewed yours and left one comment, but left the errors for editing.
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@J.M. Bush just finished writing some suggestions :)
20160420 112451 J.M. Bush · Author · edited over 1 year ago
@Joseph Keeler Was the offending grammar in the dialogue? If so, that’s just the way my dwarves be talkin’ ye see. But should it lay outside of that, I’ll fix it right away, good sir!
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · added over 1 year ago
@J.M. Bush  just read your first preview... Not bad. Not bad at all. Id say polish some of the grammar and spelling, its a little jarring when i start seeing double negatives all over the place.
But over all very good piece of work so far.
20160420 112451 J.M. Bush · Author · added over 1 year ago
I’d be down to trade! Just tag me in a post if you want to trade and I’ll get to reading!
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · added over 1 year ago
Ah the weekend: the time of the week when your free time becomes errand time.
Fb img 1523331776380 Mark A. Mix · Author · added over 1 year ago
Running out of time, but I read a few more of your stories--will get to the rest soon.  
Fb img 1523331776380 Mark A. Mix · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@J. Graham-Jones Well I finally have some free(ish) time!  Loved your story so far!  I started it several days ago and only now had the time to finish.  Pack dragons, binding magic, spirits, true-names...what more could a person ask for?  Seriously though, your world is intricate and well-conceived and your writing reflects what I’m certain must have been an abundance of world building. 
Fb img 1523331776380 Mark A. Mix · Author · added over 1 year ago
@J. Graham-Jones Well I finally have some free(ish) time!  Loved your story so far!  I started it several days ago and only now had the time to finish.  Pack dragons, binding magic, spirits, true-names...what more could a person ask for?  Seriously though, your world is intricate and well-conceived and your writing reflects what I’m certain must have been an abundance of world building. 
Ql2caeeh Allison Griner · Author · added over 1 year ago
Mark, I just read the chapter of Darkholme and I’m so hooked. Your style is 100% the sort of thing I’m drawn to read. I really like your pacing and the way you set your scenes. Fantastic job!
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · edited over 1 year ago
at this point ive read all your first chapters and I am far surpassed in writing skill compared to you all lovely writers. Im so glad I found this site and have been given an opportunity to present my work on here. But I honestly have no idea how i will be able to stand up to the rest of you! Thank you all for being so open to us newer writers.
Img 2511 Jane-Holly Meissner · Author · edited 4 days ago
@Kim Whale - your prologue had me on the edge of my seat, and the first chapter just cements (what appears to be) the central mystery - I want to know what happened to Anna! Really great description throughout, showing not telling, and the action sequence of the attack in the prologue was riveting. Really great stuff. :)
Img 5466 Elizabeth Bollmann · Author · added over 1 year ago
I havent forgotten about y’all!  Life got crazy with three kids and a deployed husband.  I’ll be able to get through some more posted work tomorrow.
Ql2caeeh Allison Griner · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Kim Whale wow, thank you! I was having a bit of a bummer night, so this is much appreciated. I’m glad you like what you’ve read so far! Thank you again for the kind words!
Me Leelyn Colclasure · Author · edited over 1 year ago
Guys, thank you for all the feedback!  It does definitely show that I should proofread a bit before posting...maybe not such a bad idea at all...

And I have not forgotten about my end of the bargain.  Work has been crazy, but tomorrow starts my weekend! I shall dig in deep!  Promise!
Img 2511 Jane-Holly Meissner · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 2 likes
Wow, thanks for the praise, @Joseph Keeler, that’s really flattering. :) I’ve gotten about halfway through your first chapter and I like it so far! Very epic.
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 2 likes
@Jane-Holly Meissner  your book is splendid! Im definitely going to preorder once i have the funds! Magical and inspiring!
Ql2caeeh Allison Griner · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 3 likes
I do still plan on getting to everyone here! Work has been mad this week and has wiped me out. But I haven’t forgotten!
Img 2511 Jane-Holly Meissner · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
I’d love some feedback on my sample chapters for Fae Child, if anyone is willing - and of course I’ll reciprocate. :)
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · edited 4 days ago
Wow you guys are all such fantastic writers! Ive hit a gold mine of reading here.
My face Joseph Keeler · Author · added over 1 year ago
Sure id love to hear feedback for my book, Aellor Prophecies, as well! Ill tell you what I think in the comments :D
Headshotprofile Antimony Noon · Author · added over 1 year ago
@~CRK No problem - and thank you for yours as well, it was extremely helpful and have made some edits based on some of the things you pointed out. :)
Snads ~CRK · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@Antimony Noon Thanks a lot for your feedback! It was very useful, and I’m glad you enjoyed the chapters. I dont normally think about thing like that when you said that the word sounded "cold" compared to the rest of the piece’s tone. Very helpful when many people show their own perspectives  
Headshotprofile Antimony Noon · Author · edited over 1 year ago
Have left some comments for a few more things and hope to work my way through the rest of the thread as I go. :)
Fb img 1523331776380 Mark A. Mix · Author · added over 1 year ago
Unfortunately I didn’t get much accomplished tonight, but as they say tomorrow is another day.  Work is kicking my butt.
Headshotprofile Antimony Noon · Author · edited 4 days ago
@Mark A. Mix Thank you for both your comments below, and your review! And thank you as well @Kim Whale for an amazing recommendation. 

Have just (terrifyingly) launched pre-orders this morning! 
Fb img 1523331776380 Mark A. Mix · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@Antimony Noon Goodness!  I really like the way you describe everything.  Teaser chapters definitely did their duty in grabbing my attention and interest!
Victorianphoto1editauthor2 Christopher Lee · Author · added over 1 year ago
Sure thing I’ll trade Reviews with anyone on the thread!
Snads ~CRK · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
I’d like to trade if anyone is interested. I just returned to Inkshares and started a new project. The others are still alive--just not on Inkshares
Unholy pursuit poster A. White · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
I’ve already delivered a few especially for those who had so few comments and feedbacks.  I haven’t done any for today yet. 
Hzkl4o r Jesse Swinson · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@J. Graham-Jones Really like the premise of your story. It’s a world I want to see more of. Excited for more backstory on the characters.
Hzkl4o r Jesse Swinson · Author · edited 4 days ago
@Kim Whale Love what I’ve read so far. Very interesting concept and story. Almost like a dystopian fantasy? The only thing I’ll say is that I was a bit confused reading the fight scene in the prologue. Aside from that, great.
Me J. Graham-Jones · Author · edited 4 days ago
I’d definitely appreciate some comments in-line on my chapters, or reviews using the Inkshares review feature :)
Ql2caeeh Allison Griner · Author · edited 4 days ago
I plan on diving in and giving feedback on stuff this evening when I’m home from work! Last night got away from me whoops. 
Fb img 1523331776380 Mark A. Mix · Author · added over 1 year ago
Well I’m off to sleep for now.  I’ll read and comment on some more tomorrow after work.  Thanks again to everyone who took the time to read my chapter!
Fb img 1523331776380 Mark A. Mix · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Jesse Swinson Wow!  A very refreshing idea, completely different from most of what I’ve read.  Can’t wait to see how Jack fairs against these two, I certainly hope he has some serious protection.  Anyway, I enjoyed the prologue and hope to read more soon.  
Fb img 1523331776380 Mark A. Mix · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@Leelyn Colclasure Just read your sample of Acolyte of the Everstream and I loved it!  I felt like I was right in the middle of a D&D campaign, and from me, that is a compliment indeed!
Fb img 1523331776380 Mark A. Mix · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Elizabeth Bollmann Just read Realm of Verilius!  It seems like a very good start, and I look forward to learning more about the exact nature of your story in forthcoming chapters!  My mind is busy forming stories and guessing at what might be going on.  I will post comment / review soon.
Img 5466 Elizabeth Bollmann · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Leelyn Colclasure @Jesse Swinson I’ve read both your stuff and will send messages in the morning.  For some reason, my DM’s aren’t working tonight.
Img 5466 Elizabeth Bollmann · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Kim Whale What did Cassandra do?!?!?! Your story flowed quite well.  The transition between Alexio (sp?) and the interview was smoothly done.  The dialogue seemed very natural, a conversation between two people who don’t know each but genuinely want to talk.  I truly enjoyed it!
Hzkl4o r Jesse Swinson · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Kim Whale Thank you so much Kim! I will definitely look into revising that part. 
Fb img 1523331776380 Mark A. Mix · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Jesse Swinson -Thanks!  Can’t wait to get off work so I can go home and read everyone’s stories!
Hzkl4o r Jesse Swinson · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Mark A. Mix No no I just wasn’t sure if the review would be for that specific chapter. Not too terribly long and a very nice read. Great work I think.
Fb img 1523331776380 Mark A. Mix · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Jesse Swinson Lol, that made me smile.  Yes I know it is a bit long and dense, but yes it is just the first chapter.  More to follow...soonish...
Hzkl4o r Jesse Swinson · Author · added over 1 year ago
@Mark A. Mix  Is that for just the chapter? Or the entire book?
 @Kim Whale Thank you!
Fb img 1523331776380 Mark A. Mix · Author · added over 1 year ago
No need to apologize.  There is a leave a review button in the bottom right hand corner when viewing a chapter in it’s entirety.  
Hzkl4o r Jesse Swinson · Author · edited over 1 year ago
So I’m going to ask a silly question...please forgive me. How do you leave a review on someone’s book?
Fb img 1523331776380 Mark A. Mix · Author · edited 4 days ago
@Kim Whale  -I just read & reviewed The City Will Fall Prelude & Chapter 1.  I enjoyed it.  I look forward to exploring more of your world and find myself intrigued by a modern world where almost everyone has some sort of magical talent.   I also want to see how Casandra fits into the events surrounding Anna...I get a bad vibe from Cassandra, but that may just be my own personal mistrust / cynicism factoring in.  Either way I look forward to reading more! 
Img 5466 Elizabeth Bollmann · Author · added over 1 year ago
Errands are done for the day which means I can get some reading done. WooHoo!  I’m looking forward to reading what everyone’s created.
Ql2caeeh Allison Griner · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 2 likes
I’m always down for giving and receiving feedback!! 
Unholy pursuit poster A. White · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
^Mark A. Mix, I’m on board. I know "Clash with the Immortals" could use more feed back and comments.
Headshotprofile Antimony Noon · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
@Mark A. Mix - just read the first chapter of Darkholme. I really enjoyed your dialogue and you set up a scene with the right amount of tension. Nathan is an interesting character and you show enough of what he’s like in his introduction to make me invested in finding out more about his motivations and his past. 

While it’s very much down to personal preference, I think some of your sentences would be stronger, particularly in moments of action, if you are sparser with your adjectives.
Me J. Graham-Jones · Author · edited 4 days ago
By using an 

Once you start typing letters after ^ that, you should see suggested names of authors to tag
Headshotprofile Antimony Noon · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 2 likes
Definitely in! 
Fb img 1523331776380 Mark A. Mix · Author · edited 4 days ago · 2 likes
Awesome!  I’ll be working my way through the people on this thread as well.  Should be able to get a good chunk done tonight after work.  Thanks everybody !
Me J. Graham-Jones · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 2 likes
I’ve been working my way through submitting some reviews, and comments, for most of the authors in this thread :)
Img 5466 Elizabeth Bollmann · Author · edited 4 days ago · 2 likes
@Kim Whale I did that on purpose.  I’ll be posting the second chapter later this week though.
Hzkl4o r Jesse Swinson · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 2 likes
I’m down!
Me Leelyn Colclasure · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 1 like
I’m in as well!  Brand new to all this and I suppose it is time to get my feet wet.
Img 5466 Elizabeth Bollmann · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 2 likes
I’d love to trade feedback, Mark. Count me in!
Fb img 1523331776380 Mark A. Mix · Author · edited over 1 year ago · 4 likes
I am new here and looking for feedback / comments / reviews on the first chapter of my story.  Will do the same for you if you ask!  Thanks in advance