Joni Dee · Author · added over 9 years ago

@Faith A. first i am chuffed to bits over your first comment, for sure I will let you read it but i still need massive editing myself and to finish it, which is very hard to do with my two small children. By the time i get to the laptop at night i fall asleep after 3 lines :-D

regarding the description: politics is essential, when u read it in full you will know .I am a bit reluctant loading more and more chapters before i go into funding, but at the moment funding from within Inkshares just won't do i fear.

I have another dilemma: thinking about uploading a chapter from part II ("book II") which takes place farther into the future of the plot line, but doesn't reveal much, then when funding is on the horizon, another one from that part that will blow you all away. Do u think it's a right strategy?

reader · Reader · added over 9 years ago

Thinking about your tagline and wondering if a little more detail would help us connect with John? Also politics seems minor compared to the espionage but if it's significant to the story definitely put it back. I think a last name would help me connect a bit more.

"Just a routine day in London. A death in a train station thrusts office worker John Lastname into a world of espionage and terrorism"

reader · Reader · added over 9 years ago

@JoniDee of course I would totally buy this! I like the story and a good editor can help with the small typos and bits that need tweaking. Btw if you want a beta reader to read the whole thing and give you comments over email, just let me know.

Joni Dee · Author · added over 9 years ago

@Peter Ryan thanks a lot. I am addressing your comments through the emails i got and sent a mail to inkshares so they can check... really appreciate it.

Peter Ryan · Author · added over 9 years ago

No worries. You've got a good story going on here. And I'm not sure why the chapter 2 comments didn't surface, a glitch in the matrix maybe?

Joni Dee · Author · added over 9 years ago

@Peter Ryan Peter, thanks for all the comments. Any idea why i can't see them past chapter 1? it's like they were deleted (i only got the email notification with the actual remark). could be a glitch in the system? thanks again.

Joni Dee · Author · edited over 9 years ago

cheers for that @Oliver Tooley ... Wasn't sure I wanted to know the answer, but since you answered like you did - I am glad you did. Does this make any sense ? :D

Oliver Tooley · Author · added over 9 years ago

I'm sufficiently intrigued to buy it yes.
As for little typos etc. let's just say, if I was perfect, I might be able to be arrogant. But spotting the mistakes of others is easy.

Joni Dee · Author · added over 9 years ago

Regarding the last comment, Special thanks to @Oliver Tooley and @Faith A. though now the question remains - will u buy the book seeing all the glitches..... ;-)

Joni Dee · Author · edited over 9 years ago

in regards to some excerpt remarks - please don't apologize, especially on grammar corrections. I appreciate any time anyone spends reading, even more so when taking time to correct and making suggestions, we are all bound to make tiny mistakes and far better to catch them while they're young ;-)