It's definitely solid writing, and the characters are real and easy to connect to. I just need more of an orientation to what kind of world we're dealing with - is this set in present day on Earth? Is it a fantasy planet? Is it Earth, but another time period? What are the rules of magic in the world? Are these people in some religion or society that the rest of the world doesn't know about? Either subtle references throughout the prose, or some sort of summary paragraph would help. :)