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168740 196377033710925 6540746 n Elle Pepper · Author · added over 2 years ago
Great premise, I don’t prefer first person.  Also, avoid phrases like "Beautiful spring day" describe what it means to be a beautiful spring day.  Over all its lacking description.  If you fleshed it out and tightened the prose I think it would be amazing.
Photo apr 05  8 32 18 pm Zaide Williams · Author · added about 4 years ago
Great premise!  Looking forward to reading more!
Sapphire Tessa Lillu · Author · added about 4 years ago
Oh, a first person point of view.  She’s a bit sassy and not meant for the snore the father makes her do. I’m very interested as how it will continue

13133161 491879717685909 4732440552120736885 n Reader · Reader · added about 4 years ago
I find that the fact that it is narrated in the first person is very intertaining, partly because of her rebellious nature I believe.
Wj7c7wa6 Nil Haghani · Author · added over 4 years ago
I like the concept a lot. And that the story is being narrated by the character herself I think gives a lot of thrill to the story. Keep up the good work.
Picture Megan King · Author · added about 5 years ago
I know it's been a month since my last upload. I've been swamped with work but I promise the next one will be coming soon. Hang in there with me.

All, thank you for the support. Things have been progressing well... the next completed chapter is up. Not sure if it's going to be the next chapter there will probably be one in between.

Picture Megan King · Author · added about 5 years ago
My first two followers, this is AWESOME! Thanks guys