This is the back story for my character Bethany. It starts with how she became who she is and why she’s consistanly hunted by the government, because she attempted and succeeded in genetic splicing on her own body that governments want to study her genetic makeup to see how she ticks but instead of running and hiding she fights back with lethal force to try and put an end to it.

To try and help me along the way i need input, like how well did the story flow, what areas need improvement, have I gone into to much detail in some section that are not so important and not enough on things that are.