Love your writing (wouldn’t comment if I didn’t), but have a major issue with the sequencing in your opening chapter.
You do a great job building up this creepy otherwordly presence/threat only to reveal it was just a dream a few paragraphs in. It was honestly deflating to read. I’d maybe remove that opening section or use it at a different time.
Otherwise, I love the concept and am enjoying the characters so far.
You do a great job building up this creepy otherwordly presence/threat only to reveal it was just a dream a few paragraphs in. It was honestly deflating to read. I’d maybe remove that opening section or use it at a different time.
Otherwise, I love the concept and am enjoying the characters so far.