I really enjoy your writing style. You definitely build character and environment together. For instance this passage:
"I tried to warm my hands in my pocket. I wore a thin blue sweater even though Al Roker said it was “a particularly chilly fall day!”

But it was my “good sweater,” and I didn’t want to cover it with a jacket; what was the point of putting on my only expensive piece of clothing if I had to hide it under a bulky bunch of polyester I bought at JCPenny?"

So much personality revealed, combined with sensory detail. Very well written.